Harris Dining Hall- (1st description)
-Intense smell of grilled sandwiches mixed with the potato soup that looks to be a couple days old
-A hallway that would comfortably suit 20 has 60 kids stacked in ready for todays lunch
-Friendly servants always with a smile serving food that has a 50/50 chance of it being edible.
-Swarms of freshman sitting together at tables, with the occasional loner eating fast to get to class.
-A variety of tables: The all girls table probably gossiping, the all guys table which is probably terribly raunchy, and then our table; 4 guys and 4 girls.
-The look of worry on most kids faces which can be attributed to a strict professor.
-Some dressed up for the occasion, and some barely dressed
-The shoe of choice for guys= sperry topsiders
-The shoe of choice for girls= sandals
-Every table has at least one member eating a tray-full, and one thats not eating.
-A constant traffic coming in and out
-A clash of noises combine from each table to equate to one loud hectic cry.
-A lot of laughter with every 6 seconds an, "Oh my God" thrown in the mix.
(2nd Description)
-Its 9:30 and the breakfast crowd is pretty much dissinegrated by now
-The fruit bar is a mess with grapes everywhere
-Some tables are trashed, others looking like they have been untouched.
-The noise level is down tremendously
-Many kids are too occupied with class and refuse to sit down
1 comment:
alright. like we talked about, you did yours in list form, which is fine. I hope by monday you are able to weave these into sentences and have something to work with. your descriptions are not only vivid, but they also have a touch of subtle humor in them--something that i usually try to work into my writing also. then again, i don't really try to, but i always come back to it. i think that it should be encouraged, and I am always happy to see writing that isn't so incredibly stuffy and serious. good work here Nick.
Where to take it? what sort of tensions exist here? Maybe you could do something and look at the waste generated by the dining hall in a single meal, or talk to the operators of this place about problems with students, or look at the dining hall in the context of the history of the college dining hall...i don't know. But the next step will definitely be to bring in some cultural aspect to the piece.
Again, good work here.
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